Tuesday, November 18, 2008

A remake of the short story A temporary Matter by-Jessica Dambreville


A lack of love


From the first I saw you, I thought you were cute. From the way you look to the way you spoke my body and heart burned for you more. When we were finally together we treated me look a queen.You told me how beautiful I was to the way your warm lips kiss my soft brown skin.Everyday I made sure I look good not only for my self but for you.As years gone by I notice that I have been lacking your warm love. You do not hold me like you use to or even look at me the same.As days go by I see my self telling how I feel as I cry my eyes a rose red but you do not show any emotion. Our love has only come to a lack of love.

1 comment:

Ms.Gonzalez said...

Great job!
What about a third person narrative? How would that change your remake?

Ms. Gonzalez